Patches posted a comment on Thursday 16th August 2007 9:34am

This is such a great story. I am sorry you don't feel as motivated to complete it as you would have if Deathly Hallows was not complete just yet. I would like to encourage you to finish this as AU. Don't think about DH as any more that a guide for ideas and just write the way you would have done. I'm sorry I haven't reviewed each chapter. I have been really busy of late. This is great. I love Luna. She is really special and has a way of making people see the real truth without beating them over the head like everyone else does. She really has always helped Harry see things that he might not have seen otherwise. I am so glad that Harry gave Dadalus Diggle the boot as his solisator. I really look forward to more of this story. Thank you for all your hard work putting this together. I can't write a story to save my neck but I am really enjoying yours. Thanks again pms

trailmix posted a comment on Tuesday 14th August 2007 10:49am

Quite a few changes in chapter 20. In the previous version I seem to recall Hermione’s debilitating health was kept from Harry instead of Dumbledore informing him early on. He promised to stop keeping things from Harry so it’s good he’s making good on his word. Though I’m curious to find out how this change will play out in the succeeding chapters since previously, Harry was quite angry about being kept in the dark.

The troll joke was a riot. Harry would probably have nightmares about Hermione finding out, if it turned out to be true. Lol. Dumbledore got him good.

I wasn’t around yet on the first incarnation of YoR so the Normandy scene is new to me. I’m glad you put it back. It gives me a little more insight to Dumbledore’s motivation. He is not a character that is easy to pin down or understand. More often than not I side with Harry’s claim that he’s only being used as a weapon mainly because of his manipulative tendencies.

I love your characterization of Luna and Oddment. The apple doesn’t fall far from the tree.

Great chemistry between Ron and Luna. She really gets Ron that’s why she has no reservations in teasing him. Their banter never fails to entertain.

timmerator posted a comment on Tuesday 14th August 2007 1:16am

I know I've read this before I just can't remember where... I don't believe I ever finished it though... if I remember right the club bit is kind of cool. Also Phineas redeems himself at least in my eyes. One question... How can she see the Bothy? :)

just wanted to say good work, looking forward to your updates.

Tim

warpwizard posted a comment on Monday 13th August 2007 4:02pm

That was a really nice ending.

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Sunday 12th August 2007 10:19pm

Loved this part again, and almost felt sory for Diggle, he was trying to do right, but got overwhelmed, and will be looking forward to what wlse hapens to Harry and the others.

PJ posted a comment on Sunday 12th August 2007 1:05pm

when are you going to have Harry stop kow-towing to every one of Dumbledork's commands? If you aren't, please let me know so I can stop reading this.

Full_Pensieve replied:

"Dumbledork" pretty well states your opinion and expectations of a fanfic.   Stop reading this.

Thanks,

Mike [FP]

justblaise posted a comment on Sunday 12th August 2007 8:57am

Find a beta who's never read the first version of your story; it skips around in some parts

Full_Pensieve replied:

That's a more difficult request than you might think.   Decent betas are hard to come by, and most have multiple commitments.   I've looked for additional betas on occasion, and they've either declined or have given offers like one chapter per month.   Because of the length and complexity of this fic, it's impractical to use betas here and there, and at one chapter per month it would take almost three years to  review just the completed material.

I looked at the formatting for Downside Up, and found that it was somewhat different than what I uploaded.   Diggle's letter looked like regular story text, which made the date of the letter  look like a story marker.   Rather than have it seem as though the events were going from August 19 back to August 2, I pulled the letter date entirely and reset the indentation and italics to match the normal format for letters and dreams.   That should help reduce confusion in this particular  instance.   Having found that formatting difference, I'm a little concerned about what else may read differently.   That's what I get for working in Word and then converting to HTML.  

Thanks,

Mike [FP]

patrick343 posted a comment on Sunday 12th August 2007 4:55am

thank you so much for updating. this story is so much more real than 6 and 7. please keep updating this is better than the books !

Crys posted a comment on Sunday 12th August 2007 3:22am

Harry really should've roasted AD about discussing the floo on his property without any input from him. Maybe the Order does have his safety in mind, but they really need to include him in the decision making.

Hmm. Clever idea for laundering deez money.

Gotta love Luna.

trailmix posted a comment on Sunday 12th August 2007 1:51am

This is one of the chapters that stayed with me long after I’ve read it. It had that movie like quality that kept playing over and over in my head; fantastic action, spine-chilling torture scene, and climactic escape. Just awesome!

The aftermath showing Hermione shirking away from Harry as he reached for her was oh so heartbreaking. A moment ago they were as close as two people can get without actually being a couple, then this happened.

This is a much frightening Voldemort. He is not too arrogant to see that Harry is as powerful as him if not more. Was the dream and the attack a ploy to gauge Harry’s power or did he feed on Harry’s rage to break him down and lure him to the dark side?

I never really thought of Ron as dense, especially when you consider how he’s unbeatable in chess. He’s just a lazy and insensitive jerk most of the time. But not in here, he finally came to his own.

On a side note, one chapter in DH curiously mirrored some of the details in YoR`s torture scene. I had a case of déjà vu when I came upon that part. But, the DH scene had a much less than satisfying effect.

trailmix posted a comment on Saturday 11th August 2007 10:05pm

I think YoR had a hand in my disappointment of Deathly Hallows. Of course, most of it was JKR’s fault. I was foolish to think that the attack at the DoM would be revisited and the abhorrent behaviour of Ron and Hermione in HBP would be explained, amongst other things.

I’m glad that you brought out Ron’s insecurities and jealousy towards Harry to the surface. It was always a constant presence in their friendship that I think wasn’t properly dealt with in the books.

Bill stepping in and daring them to have a go at each other was a perfect way to knock some sense into their addled brain. This was a turning point for Harry and Ron’s relationship and you did a great job in showing that.

Nice touch on how they started to mend their friendship, by re-enacting their first meeting at the Hogwarts train. It was simple and yet touching, most especially Ron finally apologizing to Hermione.

john2 posted a comment on Saturday 11th August 2007 6:13am

I've had the chance to read the last few chapters today after you posted them. This is the best version that I've read - tight, together, with little touches that come from having lived with the story for goodness knows how many years. I loved the Normandy scene - and I'm glad to see it back again.

Kokopelli

Anne-Marie posted a comment on Saturday 11th August 2007 5:55am

I'm happy to see the Normandy scene again. It's a very powerful image. :)

Parsing Heather's character is noticeable, since I've read and considered her first incarnation in the prose. I can see the reduction, but she's still a powerful force.

Lead on, MacDuff! ;-)

Changer posted a comment on Friday 10th August 2007 3:46pm

I'm glad to see you writing again, and very much enjoying the changes you've made- AD seems much more like a real character, and I can't wait to read the next bit.

razor_M posted a comment on Friday 10th August 2007 10:47am

I gotta say, I like this version of Mr. Lovegood better than the ass-bag in DH. You're a brilliant writer, so please continue this story, along with The Last Horcrux thing that you started. I am more interested in this story, though.

yentila22 posted a comment on Friday 10th August 2007 10:29am

This is an incredible story. I love how you have characterized Sirius and all. I hate to see Ron and Harry at each other's throats but this is your story and you write it so well.

Crys posted a comment on Friday 10th August 2007 2:05am

*frown* Order apparently knows where he is. Heather is in some sort of mess involving what sounds like a near-Mafia type organization.

Gack, this is getting messy . . .

Fascinating story, though. Looking forward to the next chapter.

The GRIM posted a comment on Friday 10th August 2007 12:04am

There appears to be a problem with this Chapter. Halfway through, it repeats part of the last chapter.

Full_Pensieve replied:

Thanks for the heads-up -- not sure what that's about, but I'll reload the text.   I wondered why the word count was so high.

Mike [FP]

 

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Thursday 9th August 2007 9:15pm

Great to see the next part of this,and looking forward to how it goes here again, and to see what the final outcome will be.

The Midnight Poster posted a comment on Thursday 9th August 2007 10:09am

You could of left Blaise in the story but as a male for laughs :) The token gay guy? Might leave Harry scard though...