By Mike [FP]
Reviews
Crys posted a comment on Thursday 9th August 2007 4:24am
The further I read, the more I think I have read this story. I remember Ron's insane jump, anyway.
Harry's an Earl, is he? *smirk* Oh, Aunt Petunia . . .
I somehow seem to have fallen several chapters behind. Need to catch up again.
jb238 posted a comment on Thursday 9th August 2007 4:00am
Just to let you know there was a chapter 2 "Beware of Goblins". I assume this was dropped intentionally.
Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Thursday 9th August 2007 3:21am
Great part here, the chat with Dumbledore, Ron and Harry talking with each other like best buds, and Remus letting his paternal instincts help him out, just great stuff here.
Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Thursday 9th August 2007 3:08am
Hmm, actually, it was nice to see a Rita that was trying to assist Harry a bit, and neat what Ron did, and with Fudge, here's hoping that he has shot himself in the foot one time too many.
Kinsfire posted a comment on Thursday 9th August 2007 2:55am
Ouch. Seeing the comment that Remus would be there as a father for as long as Harry wanted, and knowing what's coming ...
Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Thursday 9th August 2007 2:52am
Wow, this chapter may have been even more intense emotionally than the previous, with Harry trying his best to keep himself under control, and the questions that Amelia was asking the others, I look forward to the enxt part, along with what else Fudge trys, though, it was a bit odd, but nice, that he actually got onto Percy for what he did concerning his family. Interesting.
Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Thursday 9th August 2007 2:23am
Really great part here, and the interactions between the teens were well done, and Harry after he moved to the new pad, well, this should be something to see what happens next, as well as what the fallout from Rita's reports will be, and how thigs will go if he can't get back into Hogwarts soon.
DAMNED posted a comment on Friday 27th July 2007 2:32pm
KEEP IT COMING PLZ
Decumo9 posted a comment on Wednesday 11th July 2007 1:47pm
is this a harry/hermione, or is that just a passing fancy.
Full_Pensieve replied:
At one time, my answer to a shipper would have been that YoR is an H/Hr fic. Three things have changed that. First, it's not a romance - at least not in the sense that 'romance' is understood in this fandom. Second, some parts of the Portkey crowd - including a couple of 'major' writers there - decided that YoR wasn't an H/Hr fic and took it upon themselves to let me know this rather loudly and forcefully. That's why you won't find any of my work at Portkey anymore. Third, I'm not entirely sure where this re-engineering of the fic will take me. Are Harry and Hermione two of the most important characters in the story arc? Yes, I'd say they're #1 and #2 in that aspect. Is this an H/Hr fic? Some would say yes, some would say no.
Cheers,
Mike [FP]
tubin posted a comment on Monday 9th July 2007 10:40am
I'm really enjoying your re-write. I find it interesting that you have corrected small details (like Blaise vs Daphne) to fit newer canon but at its core the story can't be canon as long as Dumbledore plays such a huge part... Not that I'm complaining, mind you. You've retained the best of the previous version of the story and your writing is tighter and more vibrant, now. Thanks for putting in the effort!
Full_Pensieve replied:
Honestly, Tubin, some of the small corrections (particularly the one you referenced) were made so as to avoid long discussions with newer readers: "Blaise is a boy, you dunce!" and so on. Those of you who've been around a while have the history to know why that happened. Another was inserting Scrimgeour as an Auror. You're right, though, in that an enormous amount of YoR isn't 'canon'. It can't be. It picks up after OotP. No love potions. No horcruces. No odd characterizations. I am grabbing a few things from HBP; careful readers of YoR the First probably spotted the Half-Blood Prince's potions book in the old CH 35, for example. However, YoR was built around a 2003 plot arc and really has to stay there. Thanks for reviewing.
Cheers,
Mike [FP]
Ken Warner posted a comment on Thursday 5th July 2007 2:06am
greatly enjoying the new version - It is almost like reading a new story with familiar elements.
Do you have an ending in mind beyond where the original stopped?? (hope hope) This is one of my top unfinished stories.
warmest regards
Full_Pensieve replied:
Yes, Ken, I do have an ending in mind well beyond where the original stops. I think it's appropriate for me to see where the fandom and the readership stands after DH before I plow on with something rather ambitious and *clearly* not "canon". There are a number of small differences, indeed. I had more than three years to be bothered by elements I didn't like - LOL. Thanks for leaving a review.
Cheers,
Mike [FP]
morriganscrow posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd July 2007 10:39pm
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hahaheeheehaha posted a comment on Tuesday 19th June 2007 5:01am
wow its really good, you had hermiones reaction perfectly i thought. just 1 small note, in britain O-levels are called GCSEs. cant remember what it stands for, but thats just how it is. not meaning to be picky, just thought you might like to know
rado_hp posted a comment on Monday 18th June 2007 2:03pm
Wow! I can't wait until you finish this one! I really like where it's heading.
Pamela St Vines posted a comment on Monday 18th June 2007 2:00am
You really should add a warning to this one--something like, "THIS STORY IS ADDICTIVE AND MAY BE HAZARDOUS TO YOUR HEALTH." I thought I would just read the first chapter before nodding off last night and two hours later I had to force myself to put it down. Sorry this is a multi-chapter review, but I just had to keep "turning the page." There were so many things I loved: Dudley being an artist, Flitwick disguised as a muggle child, and THANK YOU for making Remus interesting. Having his first response to Harry's vision of Wormtail be "Where is he?" -- very cool. You didn't slow the action down, but I knew this would not be the typical Remus. Too often in the quest to prove being a werewolf doesn't mean he's bad, writers make Remus bland -- sort of a werewolf Dr. Phil or Depak Chopra. I was glad to see more of that edginess in this chapter. Thanks for writing--now I'm off to see what comes next.
Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Sunday 17th June 2007 2:36pm
Very excellent story. You've captured the uncertainty and problems of a young man Harry's age, especially one that is the committing type, as I believe canon Harry is. He has urges, he has wants, he has emotions, he just doesn't know what to do with them yet. Great job.
Also, the comments about cliché plot lines? I found none of the plot lines or devices in this fic to be cliché. Perhaps they have existed in other fics, but not as well written as here. A previously used plot line only becomes cliché, when, upon reuse, it is not used in a manner that is refreshing, but rather it drags and is overly predictable.
Too bad about Voldemort impersonating Sirius, there.
Thank you for writing.
Mike (MoA)
Full_Pensieve replied:
Thanks, Mike. I've been reading 'Cracked Reservoir', BTW, but am only about halfway through so haven't commented (I like what I'm reading, though).
With regard to clichés, I would point out to other readers of this review thread something that was discussed amongst the FFA.net writers: that Part 1 of YoR, which encompassed Chapters 1-19, was originally written between August and December of 2003. At the time, nothing was clichéd in post-OotP fics; they were all new at that time. I didn't see fit to radically change the plot arc in this revision, although nearly four years of reflection on the work has led me to change a few things.
Cheers,
Mike [FP]
Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Sunday 17th June 2007 8:57am
I'm finally reading this great story of yours. I wasn't going to give much of a review until the last posted chapter, but here is a correction for this chapter:
"We’re sking you to stick it out with him," said George
Should be 'asking' not 'sking'. Somehow I don't think they will settle their differences with a skiing contest. ;)
Mike (MoA)
Full_Pensieve replied:
Thanks for the catch, Mike! It's fixed.
Cheers,
Mike [FP]
brad posted a comment on Saturday 16th June 2007 8:14pm
This notion that telling the secret *verbally* dissolves the Fidelius charm ... pretty sure that's a new one, and unique to this story; I don't recall any such mention of such a vulnerability in canon. "twice aloud in succession"??? You must have decided on this for a reason ...
Great demonstration of the charm taking effect, with the dematerialisation of the house and neighbourhood temporarily into 'nothingness', and ending up with those present with Harry being so confused until they are told the secret.
POOR HERMIONE!! I say again, this story of yours was a masterpiece in how you used the prophecy to such avail, in slowly destroying Hermione bit by bit, driving Harry frantic in trying to stop the mental deterioration of his best friend. I just feel *so much* for Hermione here, and in the original story's future chapters.
And so the dream! With the Fidelius only freshly laid, here's Harry saying out loud - sort of - the secret that it is protecting. Dunno if he stated it twice here, or just once. Oh dear.
Great dialogue in the dream ... poor Cho, great Luna, and Ginny. And their first kiss, sort of? "world exploding" and all, very nice.
brad posted a comment on Saturday 16th June 2007 7:59pm
Great fight scene. I had to grin at Kingsley's "I apologise for the next bit in advance" to Remus. Heh.
Nice to see the distinction between Dobby and normal house elf behaviour. With Winky, too, viz her art appreciation scene in the library earlier. I'm not sure if I remember much more about the elves in the original story.
I like the little 'adjustments' you made to Harry; he's more studious, deadly serious about learning (defence) spells - a logical extrapolation from the end of OotP, where he was told that he would come up against Voldemort again - and in this chapter you've ameliorated the "time with Hermione is boring library time" stigma dating from GoF. Good to read here that he finds Hermione "rather fun". And the idea of a list, complete with scoring metric, for Harry's potential romantic partners is just classic Hermione Granger.
Ebbie posted a comment on Thursday 9th August 2007 6:22am